Hawaii isn't a " paradise" or a perfect place to live, there are many issues and flaws. One of these issues is homelessness. Homelessness is a government issue, buisness issue, public health issue, public safety issue, civil-liberties issue, and a social-justice issue. The big problems about homelessness is the large homeless population, camping in many places, and the high cost of living. Hawaii isn't just a vacation spot for tourists but also to homeless people that make it a problem in Hawaii.
The homeless population is increasing more and more. The number of homeless in Hawaii increased 61% since 2000 and if we don't stop this problem soon the numbers will get larger in no time. Rather then avoiding this issue we should come up with more solutions such as helping them get jobs and make money to get them back on there feet. Currently, more than 6000 people live on the streets in the entire U.S. Living on the streets where rape, robbery and horrible weather happens is a big threat to homeless people. Living on the streets must be a very terrifying feeling with barely having any food,and all the assaults and tragedys toward the homeless people. The more we save and take out of the streets is the less injuries and illness we have to risk.
Homeless people in Hawaii are setting up camps to sleep in many different places, Now just walking down streets or beaches you will see many lined up. Residents and visitors complain to officials about homeless camps in parks and beaches, and about homeless people walking the streets, scouring trash cans and dumpsters, asking for handouts, and begging money in stores and shopping malls.It isn't safe and very unsanitary for the people to see homelessness everywhere and if they need somewhere to stay they should go to the homeless shelter where its a place you can rely on.Tourists and people from different islands have started to notice the big homeless population which is giving them negative thoughts about our island. According to a comment on a travel website one tourist said " I really cannot fathom visiting Hawaii again. The homeless, stench of homeless and rampant crime from gangs have totally turned me off to this once beautiful place ." This makes Hawaii look no where near " perfect " and is slowly pushing our guests and tourists away.
It is not difficult for someone to become homeless from the very high cost of living in Hawaii. According to the U.S census data, the states increase in proverty is among the highest in the nation. Homeless should learn to use there money for the right things rather than spending it on unimportant things, then they will be able to afford a place to stay and meals to eat. It is difficult for low-income individuals and family's to find affordable housing, about 11.5% of Hawaii's population is living in poverty. There should be people to help lead homeless people in the right direction and help them maintain there money.
In conclusion, Homeless population, camping in many places and the high cost of living are big issues that all lead to homelessness. Hawaii isn't just a place where tourists stay but also for the homeless people that make it a big problem in Hawaii. If we don't stop this problem, Soon homelessness will become a bigger trouble to Hawaii.
Your draft is very detailed, and has tons of information. Although, I don't understand what you are trying to state. You state information about how he homeless people must feel bad. Are they suppose to be good or bad? It is confusing because it seems like you are feeling bad for them. And lastly, fix your grammar, use grammar check.
ReplyDeleteIn your draft I found grammar and punctuation mistakes that need to be fixed. You put a lot of facts in your essay, but you need more reasoning to follow the chunky paragraph format.
ReplyDeleteYOU NEED TO MAKE SURE THAT THE BODY PARAGRAPHS ACTUALLY CONNECT, MEANING THE IDEAS ARE RELATED TO EACH OTHER. REMEMBER THIS ESSAY'S PURPOSE IS NOT TO TELL THE HOMELESS WHAT TO DO, YOU ARE NOT SPEAKING TO ANYONE SO PLEASE DO NOT WRITE LIKE THAT. YOUR ESSAY SHOULD BE INFORMATIONAL AND PRESENTING AN ISSUE AND THAT IS IT. AS(2-)
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